CK Lynn

I liked this. It could go a bit faster, though, cut out the unnessecary discription.

This was pretty good. I didn't see any grammer mistakes whatsoever, which was nice. You did use the word 'she' too many times, though.

Okay, in this one story, my MC gets hit in the head hard enough to get knocked out, and I have him wake up 5 hrs. later. Can you be ...

I'd love it if you'd crit this: As it says on the post, I'm working on the full version, but this part still needs work. It's kind of a cold-blooded-police-romance, ...

This was interesting. It was a unique idea. I do think it could be longer, though. I'm looking forward to the continuation.

'Ello I'd love it if you could critique this story: thanks.

This was okay. Perhaps a bit cliche, with the guy this girl likes falling for someone else she knows. There could be more dialouge, showing who the friends are, instead ...

For anyone interested: I'm working on the novel version, firt chaptershould be posted in Advanced Crits soon.

I really can't think of much to like about this, sorry. It's an okay idea, its just presented in a way thats kind of childish. I'd like to see it ...

Great. Kind of mystical and Alice-in-Wonerlandy, with the way the narrator tells her story, like she doesn't realize ishe's truly died yet, or simply can't comprehend it. My favorite line ...

This was very good. I'm not sure about the repeating line, though. It makes it sound kind of like poetry, and I'm not sure if it really helps the piece. ...

Aargh... I was looking forward to reading this-sos sad to see it gone.

Thanks for the critiques!

Somewhere from a forgotten corner, I can still hear you. Sometimes, in the mirror I still see you. Still see your arms around me. Sometimes I can still feel your ...

This is a poem I wrote in computer class...kind of a companion to one of my stories, Carson Layne's story ( [i]brilliant[/i] title I know). It needs work. Harsh crits ...